Morph Logs: Hry'Kar

[Shano]

This is so far my first actual attempt: Morph Log #1
I would gladly accept any feedback.

[Shano]

Today, I enjoyed a more interesting and less violent encounter in New Tokyo: Morph Log #2
Yesterday, I read about the visions and the characters used in nomspeak, and this time I tried harder to get the hang of it. It's still kind of awkward for me, so if I receive any feedback I will be really thankful.

[Nosferath]

Hello! Thanks for posting your logs. So far, there's not much I can work with in order to give you useful feedback, so more logs would be appreciated.
Just a couple of things I noticed, though:
*You use "Ours" at the beginning of most of your phrases. Try to come up with more words for referring to yourself.
*"Love" is not something we express in the same way humans do. Nomads are pretty immature in terms of that, so wishing love as a farewell to a person, or expressing love towards our creators is not something you'd normally see; it's not entirely wrong, it just seems a bit out of place, at least to me. I would avoid using that expression, unless a human explains that to you and it makes an impact to your nomad.

I hope to see more logs from you!

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[Shano]

Yesterday I had a bigger encounter which involved an Outcast, a Zoner, a few AI ships as well as fellow Nomads: Morph Log #3

// P.S. 15/05/2016 - Update - This and Morph Log #4 were not a success, refer to the newer logs since they are relatively longer and more detailed.

[Shano]

Here it is from today, was scouting Freeport 11, noticed some Rheinlanders with Nomad Remains in their cargo. They were accompanied by a freelancer. Moments later got killed by the Core: Morph Log #4

// P.S. 15/05/2016 - Update - This and Morph Log #3 were not a success, refer to the newer logs since they are relatively longer and more detailed.

[Shano]

Okay, so far this is probably my longest and (self-proclaimed) most successful log so far. Happened in Omicron Delta again, 10k away from Lichtenfelde Complex, tried to make better use of visions: Morph Log #5

[Shano]

I'm starting to feel more confident and I try to make sentences longer. Here it is from today: Morph Log #6

[Shano]

Today I had my longest encounter so far, the whole thing lasted a little more than an hour, involved one Navy ship, another nomad, three Order ships (a battleship, a fighter, a freighter) and a Dragon ship, took place in Omicron Minor: Morph Log #7

[Shano]

Today's encounter was rather short, but I did my best at getting the most out of it - visions, longer sentences, trying to use different words, etc: Morph Log #8

[Nosferath]

I'm actually impressed. Those are very good logs. It seems you've capured the best from other nomads and K'Haras' speech into your own. Just a few comments:

-Try to come up with more ways for saying recurrent words in your speech, such as "children" and "darklings".
-Instead of saying "Outcast" when referring to the faction, say something like "Orange-dreamers", "Spirit-seekers", or "Sons of Ishmael" (bonus points if you know where that last one comes from).

Keep up the good work.

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