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[Lythrilux]

All personal complaints can be made to my mailbox.

Even though previously I'd start terribly written stories and never finish them, I really want to show the community that I can construct engaging arcs and create characters with depth. My GCSE A grade literacy must mean something.

NAME	PICTURE	BIOGRAPHY	STORIES
Nathan Archos	Spoiler	Spoiler A ruthless man driven by manipulated emotions and insecurity. His love for Evelyn Sharp makes him willing to do whatever it takes to bring her back, no matter how dangerous, consequential or irrational.	---------------------
Epsilon	Spoiler	Spoiler A veteran of the Battle of the Omicron Minor. Or is he? An amnesia sufferer, Epsilon has served The Core for as long as he can remember. But what he doesn't know is what haunts him. Can you even feel alive if you don't even know who you are?	Spoiler Ad Infinitum - Nodtviet's last few hours, Epsilon questions his own existence and Nova tries to catch the killer.
Nova Hawken	Spoiler	Spoiler A disgraced ex-LPI officer turned chief Core torturer and ruthless Sentinel. Nova's brutality is a projection of her own fragmented pscyhe; inflicting pain on others to cover her own pain.	---------------------
Luc LeMarsh	Soon™	Spoiler A once famed Privateer, Luc seeks retribution by bringing the Union Corse to justice and getting vengence for his fallen Gallic Junker brothers and sisters. To achieve this, he has joined the Marine Royale Gaulois. Ulterior motives include pursuing the Crown itself through an intricate game of F/M/K.	Spoiler Fantome - Luc LeMarsh walks the lonely road of vengeance amidst discrimination and adversity.
Zoe Valentine	Spoiler	Spoiler A lazy, but sweet girl who cares deeply for Liberty and the Navy she serves.	---------------------
Jack "Snake Eyes" McMaverick	Soon™	Spoiler This mercenary's greed got the better of him, leading to his eventual infection at the hands of the Aoi Iseijin. Suffering from Schizophrenia prior to his infestation, the incubi has now brought this out in full force. When the alien speaks through him, it cycles through his many voices, leaving his victims terrified and confused about who - or what - they may be dealing with.	---------------------
Cole D. Steele	Spoiler	Spoiler A mysterious man with an even more mysterious past. It's a mystery how this mystery man can be shrouded in such mystery. But then again, what is a good mystery without mystery? // Cole is part of my attempt to make more comedic writings, and to hopefully brighten up the gloomy universe of Freelancer Discovery. Please tell me if I'm not funny, so that I can quit my career whilst I'm ahead.	---------------------

Dead/Retierd Characters:
Erik Nodtviet - Dead
George Masters and his Crew - Retired
Probably mnay others I've forgotten lmao.

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[Chuba]

you just powergamed novas revival, as i killed her, wtffffff

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[Thunderer]

Nodtviet isn't dead. He can't be. As far as I know, he has been abducted by Elvis.

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[Lythrilux]

Well...

Is he really dead? Find out next time on Story Threads Z.

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[Thunderer]

Enma Toyota was really dead once (or twice?). But that had an unexpected twist. The skeleton that infected her might have something to do with that.

You just can't kill a Toyota. Especially the Hilux. I think that Enma might be a Hilux.

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[Lythrilux]

Updated, keep your eyes on the airways for the stuff I do.

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[t0l]

Hey it's my alt

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[Lythrilux]

Suh my dude.

So after today with Vagrants and realizing I can't RP I've decided to do a soft, yet non-impactful retcon of a bit of Archos' RP. I originally included the bible bashing as part of his overall design to challenge the stereotype of Disco characters in faction leadership. It was meant to be a dark satire of my own upbringing in a Christian family; pointing out the flaws of African Church Tribalism and Christian Capitalism, complete with fedora tipping. In the end, it played out like one of those 'Christian Moms' who tries to tell everyone how cool it is to love Jesus. Dab for Jesus.

I've reverted his design to an earlier concept instead, and one that I think will work out to be more popular (and if I'm honest, it was really apparent in my comm posts that I couldn't help myself doing this). He's a lot like Nodtviet, except Archos has actually got motivations and goals to justify what he's doing. He can be rationalized as a human being - perhaps at extremes - rather than the Core incarnate and evil caricature that Nodtviet was. Nodtviet had about as much depth as a puddle. Yeah, he was a meme etc and very easy to RP, but an utterly boring character to roleplay overall. That does not mean I won't be bringing him back in some form or another. He's still dead tho.

Anyway here's the updated blurb if people care:

A ruthless man driven by manipulated emotions and insecurity. His love for Evelyn Sharp makes him willing to do whatever it takes to bring her back, no matter how dangerous, consequential or irrational.

Also as a little tidbit of information: Archos is greek for "Master" (although I feel like Thunderer might come in here and tell me I'm wrong).

Expect some, hopefully decent, stories that will begin the start of the Omicrons shifting away from focusing on Delta all the time.

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