I'v been playing this a while now, trying different factions, rping around...and recently i had an idea for a faction i would love to create. The thing is i'm a great Rper but when it come to writing stuff (as i speak french) sometime i do it wrong...Anyway what i want to ask is if i can post what i wrote for a possible faction creation so people would give me their opinion and tell me what's wrong with it, so i can work on it further to make it better.
The Shadow Army is a private military company based on most of Sirius capital planets. With their large training facility they are training over 30,000 personnal a years to provide private security on planets to those who will offer the most credits. The Shadow Army is reputate for having the job done quickly and with the less colateral damage on the society, from there come their name ‘’Shadow Army’’. The Shadow Army does not accept contracts from smalls company, they mostly operate in War Zone or in Large Conflict Areas. Over a period of Ten years, the Shadow Army have provided security on planets, but time has come for them to have their own vessels to expend their buisness in outer space. The Shadow Army researcher teams have been trying to devlope new technologic weaponry to fit in their small sized Fighter and Bomber but failed, wich resulted them to use Ships that did’nt belong to any of the important sirius factions, as they try to keep diplomatic relations to ‘’Neutral’’ torward everyone when they’r not engaged in a Contract. The Shadow Army company will be accepting contracts from all large sirius factions needing assistance by :
)Providing system security,
|__Hailing inside Controlled Acces Zone of Influence of the faction
|__Conduct Secondary hail/interception inside Controlled Acces zone of the faction.
|__Conduct security patrols of Controlled Access Zone of the faction.
)Ship Assistance
|__Track enemy vessels within Controlled Acces Zone of the faction.
|__Provide immediate assistance against enemy vessels of the faction.
)Escorts
|__Provide IMPORTANT convoys a maximum security,
|__Destroys enemy ships within the Controlled Access Zone of the convoysand faction.
__|
|
(Note that the Escorts does not include small and independant trading vessels)
The Shadow Army will not be affilied with :
)Act of terrorism against any lawlful or unlawlful base or planet.
)Smuggling or escorting smugglers Convoys.
)Openly pirating trading ships in Sirius space.
Shadow Army Ships and IFF :
All Shadow Army members and ships will be tagged withNO IFF and will be equiped with standard Mercernay ID.
Shadow Army Ranks : Soldier Division –
1)- Private (Recruit) (Pter)
2)- Private (Pte)
3)- Caporal (Cpl)
4)- Master Caporal (Division Chief) (MCpl)
Officer in Charge –
Soldier Division ships will be tagged as follow : (SA-SD)Rank.Name.Lastname.
Exemple : (SA-SD)Cmd.William.Doyle
((As Mercernary ID allow to fly Freighter, we would like to have our own Luxury Liner as our base of commands for Communcation & Intel Operations))
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Intelligence & Communication Division : I&C Division have been created by the Shadow Army to make contact with the Faction willing to hire them aswell as having their own small dispatch units of Light Fighters to go gather intelligence in enemy lines. The I&C Positions go as follow :
1)- Logistic Officer (LO)
2)- Communication Officer (CO)
3)- Public Relation Officer (PRO)
I&C Division ships will be tagged as follow : (SA-IC)Position.Name.Lastname
Exemple : (SA-IC)CO.William.Doyle
Ships used : Eagle - Very Heavy Fighter, Tiger Shark - Light Fighter, CTE-10000 Civilian Bomber
Neutral : Any Faction other than the one stated above who wish to have buisness with the Shadow Army.
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I figured out to put Golden Chrysentenum in the Hostile list, as they are angry womans terrorist and Shadow Army won't deal with terrorist organisations.
First if your hostile to the GC you're probably going to be hostile with some of their allies, and technically I dont think they are terrorists, not sure about this though.
I read in a Wiki that GC were terrorists :O Well if they'r not i'm going to take them off the list.
How does the faction idea sounds so far ? The concept, etc.
Introduction
The Golden Chrysanthemums are a terrorist organisation seeking to the overthrow of the Kusari government and institute a matriarchy.
edit Faction Standings
* ALLIES:
o Blood Dragons
o Outcasts
* Enemies
o Kusari State Police
o Kusari Naval Forces
o Samura Industries
o Farmers Alliance
o Hogosha
o Bounty Hunters
As for the GC I would say you are right, concept sounds pretty good, you need a good deal more back story though, how did they start, who founded them, when did they start, what are most of the pilots like, are they trained to be fanatics, brainwashed or just very hardened soldiers, etc, etc.
Not sure if your looking for this at this point but here's my precise English edit, I struck through most deletions but didn't highlight additions cause I was lazy:
The Shadow Army : In Credits We Trust
The Shadow Army is a private military <strike>company</strike> contractor with headquarters <strike>based</strike> on most of the <strike>Sirius</strike> capital planets of Sirus. With their large training facility <strike>they are</strike> The Shadow Army is training <strike>over</strike> more than 30,000 personal a years to provide private planet side security <strike>on planets</strike> to those who will offer the most credits. The Shadow Army <strike>is reputate</strike> has a reputation for <strike>having</strike> getting the job done quickly and with the <strike>less</strike> least collateral damage on the society, <strike>from there come</strike> hence their name ‘’Shadow Army’’. The Shadow Army does not accept contracts from smalls company, they mostly operate in War Zones or in Large Conflict Areas. Over a period of ten years, the Shadow Army <strike>have</strike> has provided security on planets, but the time has come for them to have their own vessels to expand their business in outer space. The Shadow Army research teams have been trying to develop new <strike>technological weaponry</strike> weapon technology to fit in their small sized Fighter and Bomber but failed, which resulted in them using ships that didn't belong to any of the important Sirus factions, as they try to keep diplomatic relations ‘’Neutral’’ <strike>torward</strike> with everyone when they’re not engaged in a Contract. The Shadow Army company will be accepting contracts from all large Sirus factions needing assistance by :
)Providing system security,
|__Hailing inside <strike>Controlled</strike> limited access Zones of Influence of the faction
|__Conduct Secondary hail/interception inside <strike>Controlled</strike> limited access <strike>zone</strike> ZOIs of the faction.
|__Conduct security patrols of <strike>Controlled</strike> Limited Access <strike>zone</strike> ZOIs of the faction.
)Ship Assistance
|__Track enemy vessels within <strike>Controlled</strike> limited access <strike>zone</strike> ZOIs of the faction.
|__Provide immediate <strike>assistance against</strike> interception of enemy vessels of the faction.
)Escorts
|__Provide IMPORTANT convoys <strike>a</strike> the maximum of security,
|__Destroy enemy ships within proximity of convoys and <strike>Controlled</strike> limited access <strike>zone</strike> ZOIs of the faction.
__|
|
(Note that the Escorts do not offer protection for small and independent trading vessels)
The Shadow Army will not be affiliated with :
)Acts of terrorism against any lawful or unlawful base or planet.
)Smuggling or escorting smuggler Convoys.
)Openly pirating trading ships in Sirus space.
Shadow Army Ships and IFF :
All Shadow Army members and ships will be tagged with NO IFF and will be equipped with standard Mercenary IDs.
Soldier Division ships will be tagged as follow : (SA-SD)Rank.Name.Lastname.
Example : (SA-SD)Cmd.William.Doyle
((As Mercenary ID allow to fly Freighter, we would like to have our own Luxury Liner as our base of commands for Communication & Intel Operations))
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Intelligence & Communication Division : An I&C Division has been created by the Shadow Army to make contact with the factions willing to hire them as well as having their own small <strike>dispatch units</strike> compliment of Light Fighters to go gather intelligence in enemy lines. The I&C Positions go as follow :
1)- Logistic Officer (LO)
2)- Communication Officer (CO)
3)- Public Relation Officer (PRO)
I&C Division ships will be tagged as follow : (SA-IC)Position.Name.Lastname
Example : (SA-IC)CO.William.Doyle
Ships used : Eagle - Very Heavy Fighter, Tiger Shark - Light Fighter, CTE-10000 Civilian Bomber
Quote:you need a good deal more back story though, how did they start, who founded them, when did they start, what are most of the pilots like, are they trained to be fanatics, brainwashed or just very hardened soldiers, etc, etc.
Noted. most of my idea came when i was taking a shower or before going to bed, so i hoped on my computer and started writing. I guess im going to take another shower to get more idea! hehe.
You changed all the ''Controlled'' to ''Limited'' Acces Zone. But by ''Controlled'' Access zone here's an Exemple :
RM Hire us to do security in New Berlin. Most of RM don't go at the Sigma-13 JH, so i would say their Controlled Zone stop at Sigma-13 JH. Therefor we wouldnt go at Sigma-13 JH because they don't want to deal with what's going on there.
Ha ha ha, sounds great, you've definitely got a good start but from what I've seen these things are pretty in depth and take some serious mulling over, not to mention 500,000,000 credits.
The Shadow Army as have been created very long time ago, back in the time where humans beeing were crossing blades to deal with their conflicts. In War time, the Shadow Army would be hired by the high gouvernor and King that could affroad to pay the most gold. The Shadow Army has survived trought ages by naming a new succesor of the same blood when the current leader died. The Shadow Army adapted their way of beeing whenever new technologies came in to become a private military company with headquarters on most of the capital planets of Sirius.. Most of the Shadow Army pilots and trained Soldiers are generally old Criminals, Pirates and people who are looking for challenges and earning money.With their large training facility they are training over 30,000 personnal a years to provide private security on planets to those who will offer the most credits. During the training phase to join the Shadow Army, all Soldiers will be given a weapon that they will hold with them as if it was their own baby. The Soldier will learn to deal with situations where Order and Control is needed, aswell as having weeks of Survival training. The Shadow Army soldiers will also be trained for Bare Handed Combat, aswell as knife fighting. Having this training done would only complete the first step to becoming a Pilot of the Shadow Army. After the first phase of the Soldier training, the Soldiers will be studying to control Fighter and Bomber class ships on a realistic flight simulator concepted by Researchers working for the army. They will be required to pass a series of long exams prior to proceed to the last phase of the training. Before setting flight, all the Soldiers will have to endure gravity chambers and training scimilar to jets pilots back in the 21th Century. The Shadow Army has a reputation for having the job done quickly and with the less coll.ateral damage on the society, heince their name Shadow Army. The Shadow Army does not accept contracts from smalls company, they mostly operate in War Zone or in Large Conflict Areas. Over a period of Ten years, the Shadow Army have provided security on planets, but time has come for them to have their own vessels to expend their buisness in outer space. The Shadow Army researcher teams have been trying to devlope new technologic weaponry to fit in their small sized Fighter and Bomber but failed, wich resulted them to use Ships that didnt belong to any of the important sirius factions, as they try to keep diplomatic relations to Neutral torward everyone when theyr not engaged in a Contract. The Shadow Army company will be accepting contracts from all large sirius factions needing assistance by :
)Providing system security,
|__Hailing inside Controlled Acces Zone of Influence of the faction
|__Conduct Secondary hail/interception inside Controlled Acces zone of the faction.
|__Conduct security patrols of Controlled Access Zone of the faction.
)Ship Assistance
|__Track enemy vessels within Controlled Acces Zone of the faction.
|__Provide immediate assistance against enemy vessels of the faction.
)Escorts
|__Provide IMPORTANT convoys a maximum security,
|__Destroys enemy ships within proximity of the convoy.
__|
|
(Note that the Escorts does not include small and independant trading vessels)
The Shadow Army will not be affilied with :
)Act of terrorism against any lawlful or unlawlful base or planet.
)Smuggling or escorting smugglers Convoys.
)Openly pirating trading ships in Sirius space.
Shadow Army Ships and IFF :
All Shadow Army members and ships will be tagged with NO IFF and will be equiped with standard Mercernay ID.
Soldier Division ships will be tagged as follow : (SA-SD)Rank.Name.Lastname.
Exemple : (SA-SD)Cmd.William.Doyle
((As Mercernary ID allow to fly Freighter, we would like to have our own Luxury Liner as our base of commands for Communcation & Intel Operations))
| Intelligence & Communication Division : I&C Division have been created by the Shadow Army to make contact with the Faction willing to hire them aswell as having their own small dispatch units of Light Fighters to go gather intelligence in enemy lines. The I&C Positions go as follow :
1)- Logistic Officer (LO)
2)- Communication Officer (CO)
3)- Public Relation Officer (PRO)
I&C Division ships will be tagged as follow : (SA-IC)Position.Name.Lastname
Exemple : (SA-IC)CO.William.Doyle
Shadow Army Rules :
- During a contract or a mission, no ship will be attacked unless an immediate superior order to fire.
- We are NOT pirate hunters, or unlawlful ships hunter, we do not interact unless provoked or under contract to do so.
- All our ships are equiped with a device that will disable to Pilot in case of failing to obey immedate superior or rules of the Shadow Army. The ship will auto-pilot to the nearest friendly or neutral base and will be picked up later and be escorted to our Cell Block Facility.
Ships used : -Eagle - Very Heavy Fighter,
-Tiger Shark - Light Fighter,
-CTE-10000 Civilian Bomber
Allowed equipments on Ships : -All Civilian Class Weaponary
-Nova Antimatter Torpedo Launcher
-Supernova Antimatter Cannon
-Mini Razor Cannon
Shadow Army Factions Relation
Hostiles : -
- Xenos
-Nomads
-Phantoms
-Wild
Unfriendly : -
-Golden Chrysentenum
-Gaians
Note that Unfriendly factions are not meant to be hunted on sight, they will just be refused if asking to work with the Shadow Army.
Neutral : Any Faction other than the one stated above who wish to have buisness with the Shadow Army.
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