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Offline Matthews
06-22-2020, 11:41 PM, (This post was last modified: 06-22-2020, 11:49 PM by Matthews.)
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Please feel free to give some Feedback if you want. It's my first story written in English and for Discovery. I'm always looking to further my efforts. Thank you.

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Offline Traxit
06-23-2020, 12:34 AM, (This post was last modified: 06-23-2020, 12:41 AM by Traxit.)
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I haven't read the story but from first impressions I was deterred from even attempting to read it due to the lack of;
Formatting
Proper Paragraphs
(Slighty) annoying bodytext font - I recommend to use Sans-Serif fonts such as Open-Sans
Colour coding dialogue

The forums have a lot of tools to make your posts more accessible and readable - I highly recommend playing with them.

PS: Personally, it's half the fun of crafting stories and RP posts.

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Offline Matthews
06-23-2020, 11:44 AM,
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(06-23-2020, 12:34 AM)Traxit Wrote: I haven't read the story but from first impressions I was deterred from even attempting to read it due to the lack of;
Formatting
Proper Paragraphs
(Slighty) annoying bodytext font - I recommend to use Sans-Serif fonts such as Open-Sans
Colour coding dialogue

The forums have a lot of tools to make your posts more accessible and readable - I highly recommend playing with them.

PS: Personally, it's half the fun of crafting stories and RP posts.

Thank you. I've added propper paragraphs and edited it so it should be a lot more readable now.

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