Plea to the Outcasts Feedback

[DarthCloakedGuy]

Story can be found here.

Feedback please?

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HISPANIANS, FOR THE GREATER GLORY OF HER PEOPLE
A Plea to the Outcasts (PG)
CHARACTERS:
LR-I.Got.Nothin', LR-Empty.Pockets, and LR-Dead.End = "Lash" McDaggit of the Liberty Rogues.
SMUG~Eat.My.Exhaust = Jane Terraman and Bob McAdams, smugglers of the Liberty Rogues.
[H]Cj.Martino.Perez = Martino Perez, self-declared Counselor of the Hispanians.
AVATAR MADE BY SPIRIT! THE AWESOME.

[Dashiell]

reads good enough. but is this a individual story, or working towards some 'server rp'?

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[DarthCloakedGuy]

reads good enough. but is this a individual story, or working towards some 'server rp'?

This will be the start of our forum RPs, many more may yet come.

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HISPANIANS, FOR THE GREATER GLORY OF HER PEOPLE
A Plea to the Outcasts (PG)
CHARACTERS:
LR-I.Got.Nothin', LR-Empty.Pockets, and LR-Dead.End = "Lash" McDaggit of the Liberty Rogues.
SMUG~Eat.My.Exhaust = Jane Terraman and Bob McAdams, smugglers of the Liberty Rogues.
[H]Cj.Martino.Perez = Martino Perez, self-declared Counselor of the Hispanians.
AVATAR MADE BY SPIRIT! THE AWESOME.

[Dmitry]

Unlikely that this association of Outcasts and Corsairs will once come, but organizing of such kind of political a movement is possible, though, in my opinion, it is originally destined to fail, just like Strays

[DarthCloakedGuy]

Unlikely that this association of Outcasts and Corsairs will once come, but organizing of such kind of political a movement is possible, though, in my opinion, it is originally destined to fail, just like Strays

Eh, these fellows are a persistent bunch. They've already been at it for forty years now, who's to say the Outcasts will ever crush these irksome roaches?

Tune in next year.

Also, I do not approve of the lack of feedback. A hundred and nine views, and only two people posting feedback? Arrgh!

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HISPANIANS, FOR THE GREATER GLORY OF HER PEOPLE
A Plea to the Outcasts (PG)
CHARACTERS:
LR-I.Got.Nothin', LR-Empty.Pockets, and LR-Dead.End = "Lash" McDaggit of the Liberty Rogues.
SMUG~Eat.My.Exhaust = Jane Terraman and Bob McAdams, smugglers of the Liberty Rogues.
[H]Cj.Martino.Perez = Martino Perez, self-declared Counselor of the Hispanians.
AVATAR MADE BY SPIRIT! THE AWESOME.

[RmJ]

edit: being revised as requested my grammar isn't well at 3:40am I apologize for the post that really didn't make sense.

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