A Life Half Lived: Dusty Lens writes something about a Xeno.

[Dusty Lens]

http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?ac...t=0#entry214788

I don't write often write. Due to being wretched. Maybe criticism will improve that issue.

Feel free to give two cents if you have 'em.

[Akura]

I've been meaning to read this, so here goes. Writing this as I read.

This:

The droplet, a speck, of antimatter dashed through the stars wrapped securely within its massive cocoon of rapidly decaying electromagnetic energy. An errant molecule of hydrogen, a lonely scrap of long drifting space dust would have been more than enough to alter this moment, but all was swept aside before the torrent of energy radiating from the fiery ball. When it collided with the outer hull of the unshielded transport, the reaction between the durasteel and antimatter particle was catastrophic. The resulting blast of energy sundered the vessels hull and laid bare its plasma reactor, which was itself already in its final stages of destruction, its volatile energies flooding from structures too stressed to maintain containment.

Seconds slipped by and the transport erupted into a brilliant cascade of fire, its final spark of life to be found in the quickly dimming control pod spinning into the void, frozen atmosphere sputtering as that too disintegrated into nothing resembling a vessel.

He found it easier to look at what he had done from an academic perspective. Had written about it from an academic perspective before, but those days were long past.

Is epic.

You made the violent action of throwing a SNAC at a Transport read like ballet in my mind's eye... wait, yes, no. Whatever, I loved that bit especially.

A large convoy of broken Kushiro transports and mauled fighters burnt their last between the shorted trade lanes, it was a hellish view.

Typo.

giggled as he noted the name of the deck: proxies and women, epic stacking material indeed.

I loled so much I woke up my parents, you just made my day.


....And I finally finished reading it. That bit in the elevator shaft was very well written, but my favourite has to be the SNAC impact written poetically.

I want to read more :(

[Dusty Lens]

Thank you for pointing out the typo. I appreciate it.

[Blighter]

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[Zelot]

[font=Courier][color=#ffccff]Is a g[color=#ff99ff]ood r[color=#cc66cc]ead [color=#ff99ff]lik[color=#ffccff]e [color=#ff99ff]a[color=#cc66cc]ll[color=#ff99ff] t[color=#ffccff]he[color=#ff99ff] st[color=#cc66cc]uff you write, can't say much else.

Greatest bump ever.

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