A weird tale

[Glis]

Here's a link to the story.

And the feedback goes in this thread.

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[Jimothy]

Was a bit of a handful to read, there seemed to be a slight lack of punctuation.
Once I got with the flow (And past the colour) it was a good read.

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I was formerly know as Spiritar.

It's been a while.

[Ness]

As Spirit said it was a bit hard to read but it was a great story no less, I liked it a lot.:)

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Story about Godric Edmund
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[Yaoquizque]

Protip : You can avoid "Wall of text" syndrome by using the return carriage key.

Overall it's good.
There is enough details to add some dimension to the story.

One thing though. I think you're maybe neglecting the description part. Sipping some tea or checking neuralnet is not enough.

Keep up the good work.

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[NoxNoctisEra]

its quite good. a better description like Yaoquizque mentioned would have been delightful. but over all, for the set up and presentation, was a very nice read. well done;)