Folks, I'm gonna take a leaf from Vince Piccio's book.... I would love to hear everyone's opinion, comments, thoughts on my new RP story Jacinta Villanueva.
Not coz I'm a shameless egotist... ok maybe a bit... but because writing is what I wanna do with my career for one. I went to quite a bit of effort with this one, and I'm interested what you all think:)
So tell me if you liked it, it sucked, too soppy, to dry, whatever.... Come On!! Give it to me, man, I can take it!!!
i enjoyed reading it ( untill around 3/4 of it - when i was reminded to get on working [at my students job atm in university - and i am supposed to organize files and not to browse in FL] )
nicely done - if you could squeeze the depths of this into an inGame char, it would be great. - but i fear that the ingame engine is too limited to express such... .:)
I liked it very much, onca. I think you were really successful in creating an atmosphere around the story without even resorting to excessive descriptions. In my mind it struck me with the same feeling I had when I first saw the conversation between Esteban Vihaio and Black Mamba/Beatrix Kiddo in Kill Bill vol. 2. Not that the stories have anything to do with each other, and Farquar has nothing of the sarcasm Esteban had. I think it's the cool with each dealt with their situations.
The Spanish words helped a lot with creating an authentic atmosphere and really added to the story without disturbing it. But I'm a Portuguese speaker and can understand the terms, so I don't know how valid is my impression in that.
One thing is for sure. It will be refreshing to see Jacinta's name in game. I always like to see the characters, of which I know the stories, present themselves in action. Thinking of this I wish I had posted my characters' RPs before even creating them in game.
Now I am sorry I forgot to make such an introduction for Teresa Chavez, but Maniaco's ...umm, disappearance was a 'last moment idea' and I had to improvize...
Thanks for your comments, everyone, I appreciate it.
I forgot to mention, my thanks to Korrd and to SwissScorch (and Vape!) for their help with the Spanish words.
' Wrote:if you could squeeze the depths of this into an inGame char, it would be great. - but i fear that the ingame engine is too limited to express such... .:)
Heh, yeah she'll just end up cruising around and shooting stuff like everyone else;)
' Wrote:very well written, i only wish i could be so eloquent in my stories.
Much as I am terrified by Mon'star, I think you definitely bring something unique to Discovery through him. Eloquence? meh, comes from watching years of TV:D