@Adamantine Fist: Looks okay, but I think you're right about the eyes. I might be able to supply a fixed render in a moment without 'em. Also, could you maybe shrink the image just a tad bit, not much, but a bit? Anyways, I'll post the fix'd render in a moment.
@Orin: I like the design, but the excessively pale pupils (or whatever you call the colored part of the eye) in comparison to the rest of the eye is kind of disturbing. I'll be posting a render with different eyes in a moment anyway, so try replacing it with that. Also, the text just isn't doing it for me. Looks kind of... cheap? Erm... I dunno, the metallic feel is nice, but the hollow-like effect isn't the best, imo. Maybe make it solid metal, with a shine and such?
@Dopamino: To be honest, I can't really think of anything on which to improve the look, 'cause it's already really good. If you can think of something to change though, would be interesting to see how it'd look.
I like Dop's attempt, but I'd also like to see what others can come up with too D: Could you try at least? I'm paying for all (serious) attempts anyway, so it wouldn't be wasted time.
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Well, this has been up for a week now, and only 2 submissions. I'll leave it up for a bit longer, and hopefully more people will try their hand at it.
@Orin and Dopamino: Could you guys replace the old render with the new one in your attempts?
EDIT: Now that I think about it, would it be possible to add on some links to it? Specifically one for "Logs", and one for "Investigations" (or something else like "Psychological Assessment", it's going to be linking to the reports of an officer or something on the character).
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Just don't mess it up too much out of drunkenness -- Erm... I mean, good luck;)
EDIT: About those links... the URL for the logs is "http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=29045", and the psychological assessment is "http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=29088". Thanks!
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