Osiris Imperium and the Osiris Class A.K.A. Kay'a

[Colonel Z.e.r.o.]

http://discoverygc.com/forums/index.php?showtopic=58667

Here I tried to give a little back story about a nation that exist in my story, It's also the nation in which lenox Casper (not his FL equivalent) originates from.

Please tell me how you feel and what changes could be made.

Another not when I finish this draft the title will begin to make sense, but no, it has nothing to do with the order.

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Nathan's Log || The "Real Story" of Lenox Casper

[Colonel Z.e.r.o.]

Any suggestions?

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Nathan's Log || The "Real Story" of Lenox Casper

[Colonel Z.e.r.o.]

Added on another segment. I'll probably give me insight in the desperation chapter (like a scenario that led up to that event.)

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Nathan's Log || The "Real Story" of Lenox Casper

[Colonel Z.e.r.o.]

OK guy it's very messy and a little muddled but this is ultimately the beginning and the role this nation plays in my story, please feel free to post any and all comments relating to it. Any suggestions that would would help me improve it will be greatly appreciated.

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Nathan's Log || The "Real Story" of Lenox Casper

[Colonel Z.e.r.o.]

no feed back?

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Nathan's Log || The "Real Story" of Lenox Casper