The Retribution Chronicles

[Leo]

BIIIG twist coming up soon, hope you guys are ready.

Some updates:

"Allecto Dock System" is a hint thread, only In Character but the thread will be in the form of some kind of "host" computer that controls "something" that won't be revealed until the END of the book.

Hope you guys are enjoying the story, give me some feedback, always curious.

~Leo

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You fear oblivion. Yet you forget. The universe remembers every atom of your being. Even dust hums your name in the dark.
Roleplay is dead. Long live Powertraders and PvP I guess.

[marauder]

Feedback huh?

Hows this, you keep writing and I'll keep reading.

Deal?

[Leo]

Sounds like a deal.

If you all want a hint, check out what Wikipedia says about "Allecto";)

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Allecto

~Leo

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You fear oblivion. Yet you forget. The universe remembers every atom of your being. Even dust hums your name in the dark.
Roleplay is dead. Long live Powertraders and PvP I guess.

[Leo]

So, Leo's memory has returned in full force, however, there are still mysteries with in Tainted that he does not know about, mysteries that will haunt him until he destroys what remains of Tainted, and returning the universe back to stability...

Thoughts?

~Leo

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You fear oblivion. Yet you forget. The universe remembers every atom of your being. Even dust hums your name in the dark.
Roleplay is dead. Long live Powertraders and PvP I guess.

[Zapp]

Don't ruin the ending!:)Oh, and I have an idea, it's in your PM.

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[Leo]

Got it and replied.

Changed the ending of the story a little bit, changing the entire story a tad bit too, will update when I can.

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You fear oblivion. Yet you forget. The universe remembers every atom of your being. Even dust hums your name in the dark.
Roleplay is dead. Long live Powertraders and PvP I guess.

[Leo]

Hmmm...

Starting to wonder if I only have one reader the entire time I've been writing this book...prehaps it's time to stop.

~Leo

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You fear oblivion. Yet you forget. The universe remembers every atom of your being. Even dust hums your name in the dark.
Roleplay is dead. Long live Powertraders and PvP I guess.

[Laowai]

haha ok no, you dont:)


Ive decided after posting my own feedback thread that im gonna try to read as much of other people's Rp as i can.

Ive just started yours, will read it over the next few evenings while im hanging out here and will write back when im done.

I write mine as well to keep my brain active and as a time out thing - dont stop writing it, just bump it every so often when you think people arent out there - they are and will read!

Cheers:)

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[Leo]

Thanks for the kind words Laowai, but I'm thinking of canceling the story completely. 58 views at two pages on Chapter four and hardly anyone comments on the story, what point is there in writing if no one is going to read it? None.

I may even cancel the other story as well, as it seems my writing abilities arn't enough for the people here to enjoy. What sense is there in writing a book when no one will read it? Exactly, none.

~Leo

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You fear oblivion. Yet you forget. The universe remembers every atom of your being. Even dust hums your name in the dark.
Roleplay is dead. Long live Powertraders and PvP I guess.

[Laowai]

Thanks for the kind words Laowai, but I'm thinking of canceling the story completely. 58 views at two pages on Chapter four and hardly anyone comments on the story, what point is there in writing if no one is going to read it? None.

I may even cancel the other story as well, as it seems my writing abilities arn't enough for the people here to enjoy. What sense is there in writing a book when no one will read it? Exactly, none.

~Leo

Hey mate

I'm now at the end of Chapter 2, gonna hit the next chapters soon - it's good, and you have also given me some ideas:)

I wouldn't cancel your stories. Ask yourself why you are writing them first, you said it was to keep yourself busy while you were posted out in the desert, has it done that? Do you enjoy writing them? You must, or you wouldn't have put so much work and thought into it - you have planned the story out too!
your writing abilities are good, the only thing you do is have some spelling and grammar mistakes! But your story telling is good and descriptive, the depiction of in game places and having them woven throughout the story is also really good.

I write for my characters for my own reasons - it gives me something to do, it gives them a Role Play background that i can use in game, and whoever reads them can know as well.. and lastly because i just enjoy doing it.
I put a feedback thread up on one of my sets of stories the other week and got bugger all replies to it, though the ones i did were nice. I was a little disappointed - but meh, i enjoyed writing them, i'll bump the thread every so often and see what people say, but in the end im going to keep writing them if for nothing more than i like doing it,

People do read them, but there is a lot in these forums - i've read lots of people's Role Play stories this week and there is a lot - and i know im not even scratching the surface.

I guess my point is, keep on going with it, bump it every so often - When you get back in game by the way... those of us who have read your stories will know a WHOLE lot more about your characters:)


Cheers

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