Saigo.Watanabe

[Laowai]

Ah yes... the story feedback want....;)

I did this for a while, then i realised the cold harsh truth, stories are only read at certain times, by certain people and its few and far between.
Thats not to say they dont get read, - but more that, they do, but not often, and not regularly, and only by a few people when the mood takes them.
I know if only 4 people i think who have read the entirety of my Corsair story for example (and it is rather long).

However, i do read them, when the mood takes me now:)I read yours....

I can only give feedback based on what i like in a story, that doesnt mean its really a good criticism of your story at all, whether its actually good or bad from a literary point of view... it just means its my opinion of whether it has the things i like to find in fiction that i read!;)


So far? Its not bad - Though to me, whats lacking is a real depth of character... who is this person, what motivates her, what does she think, feel... real chunky background that you can sink your teeth into and suspend disbelief for a moment and actually get into the head of this fictional character.
That said, so far the writing is solid, its descriptive of events in a good way, i say keep it up and expand it.

Lastly, general advice for stories (again this is just my opinion) - I tend to use mine as ways of fleshing out my characters in a way that i cant completely do in game, its as much for me as anyone else... when i go ingame, i have this massive and complex backstory and various story arcs that give me a very real and solid foundation for who my character's are and why they do what they do.... I do like writing them... Its nice to know some people read them as well, but i dont bank on anyone reading them, its just a nice surprise when i find someone has.

Anyway, good work and keep it up!

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