Marvin J. Orphelia

[Dab]

I skimmed the first paragraph and already ran straight into two glaring contradictions in lore.

First; Corinth and Sparta were not built in 795 A.S. They were built around 802-803 A.S.

Second; Addicted to Liquid Cardamine that, lore-wise, hasn't been made into a form that can be used on humans without killing them. Treewyrm can go into more detail on that, but it's just being researched, and currently used on two test subjects. Not to mention, Liquid Cardamine, even the version that doesn't work for humans is extremely rare, even in the Outcasts, who are the only ones with any real access to it. The version that does work for humans isn't only rare.. But has only one source; Doc Jameson, and he doesn't give them beyond his two test subjects. So your character can't be using Liquid Cardi, unless he was dead from using the Nomad form.

I'll continue reading.


EDIT: Oh, and being a target for loansharks because of that addiction doesn't make sense either.. Considering you can't buy Liquid Cardi at all.

Oh yeah, don't remember if I ever told you.. Wait, I did.. The Zoners don't have 'commodores'.. Or even a military really...

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