Marvin J. Orphelia

[kuth]

Cam, honestly, its a good read in regards to being fiction.

As far as being an RP story for this server? It fails fairly hard.

You make Marvin out as some god in human/cyborg form. You didn't do your research into Zoner lore, so there are a ton of flaws in that. He was flash cloned? Hidden on a station that hadn't been built? Commander of a Zoner war fleet that didn't exist and still doesn't? Owner of a Battlestar or two or three? Commised an entire war fleet to be built in around 19 years? Without any other Zoner noticing or having a say in it?

Lividia following your orders? You being in command of a Zoner war fleet? Conducting war games in a bio-dome? Marvin having limitless funds and resources to build ships. Addicted to liquid Cardi from Malta? Having trained soldiers that are superior to any in the sector? Invasion plans? Invasion with a non existent force?

It was entertaining to read, but no where near believable or even remotely possible as the RP of a character on this server. For more than one reason.

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Lurker