Feedback for my stories

[Derkylos]

Pretty damn good as it goes:)

Incidently ...

The Awakening

One of us is gonna have to change, and I sure do love this dress.

NB: The titles kinda suck, but that's 'coz im not very good at titles...suggestions welcome.

They're more placeholders than anything...and that is a pretty cliched title...

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[Derkylos]

Added another one...sorry about the messed up inverted commas, but I can't be bothered to go 'round and replace them all right now. maybe later.

(damn Microsoft Word...)

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[Zapp]

On the new 'Defection' one... break up the wall of text with line spaces in between paragraphs before I'll read it, OK? Otherwise, I get a headache and lose concentration.

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[Malaclypse 666]

"Defection"

Wall of Text! Aaargh!

Put some paragraphs in that sucker, and call me. Then I'll read it, mkay...?

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[Derkylos]

Sorry, it looked Ok in MS word...added some spaces in, now, hope it's easier to read...

On a related note...what programmes do people use to write stories in before they upload them? MSword obviously isn't working at all.

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[Zapp]

I usually write them into the post, or use Google Docs.

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[DeathsOverture]

Good job on "The Crew of the Gremyln," there's a lot of inspiring character development there. I'm really sorry about your parents, though :(

EDIT:

Derkylos originates from Liberty. Son of Universal employees, he often flew alongside his parents on trade runs. One fateful day, the family's Rhino was rear-ended by a DSE train while leaving a trade lane. His parents were killed instantly as the ship broke up.

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[jammi]

Sorry, it looked Ok in MS word...added some spaces in, now, hope it's easier to read...

On a related note...what programmes do people use to write stories in before they upload them? MSword obviously isn't working at all.

I wrote all of Destiny in M$ Word. With the crappy newer versions you have to remember to put two spaces between paragraphs when copy/pasting stuff over. The lines might look like they've spaced themselves, but they haven't. Double spacing is your friend.

And just to be different: http://www.weebls-stuff.com/toons/Owls/

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[Tarkis]

Just read them all, and they were all good and easy to fully read.
Except for the last, which was a bit hard to read all the way through.
That's just because it's not a story, but a short bit on every member of a crew. So it's not "bad".

I don't have any suggestions on making them better,
they're good enough as is, imo.

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Character Stories/Backgrounds:
Cat o' Nine Anodyne (Character no longer exists.)
Delirium (Character no longer exists.)
Journal of Tarkis, the Orphan.(Character no longer exists.)
Story of Iggy, the Amazing Citizen. (Character no longer exists.)